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here's something i wrote a few months back when some crap happened to me. Why is it that sad poems are the best?

 

The world's turned against me, I've got no one to turn to

Everything you did to me hurt me and not you

you didn't even consider for a second what you had done

I wanna scream when i see you, turn my back and run

But I can't do that no, my heart yearns for you

Why I'm so hungover this love I ain't got a clue

We were so perfect until you changed your ways

You felt so differently in just a matter of days

You didn't even realise, you'd just killed a part of me

My life, my pride all broken, buried at sea

You didn't say why, I didn't understand

why a 'break' was needed when we were hand in hand

I could see it in your eyes there was something there

yet still we were seperate, you didn't even care

You lead me on for a while and then without reason

You finished me off, cut me, it felt like treason

 

No matter how i feel, no matter i do

The only things in my mind are of you

Memories of the past flash through my head

I freeze and panic I'm like the living dead

Loving you was a trapdoor, I can't get out

And now all i can do is scream and shout

next time my heart yearns for love, i'll say 'never'

cause your love is a curse that's lasting forever

 

I'm just a pawn in your game; but when the time arises

I'll be able to escape you and run in varied disguises

I remember loving you, what a goddesses face

No i look back and I see no grace

Your seem happy in the arms of him, the 'other'

If I see him in person i'd treat him anything like my brother

I want to break him and hurt him, and then you'll see

it was unfair the way you tormented me

Maybe one day you'll realise when you ain't blind

To have your heart broken, twisted ain't right

To have your passion ripped out creates devastation

I thought you were like jesus, god's own creation

And you'd never change, it was your beauty I saw

But all i remember of you 'I don't love you no more'

Do you know how it feels to be ruined and broken

Like a masterpiece I'm ruined, forever remain unspoken

Now I lay by myself, and ask questions to the sky

Was whatever you told me simply a lie?

No i'm stronger than you I'm going to prove it

Finish this repression, I'mma let loose and take a hit

From now on it can never be the same as before

Cos the me you knew doesn't exist anymore

 

No matter how i feel, no matter i do

The only things in my mind are of you

Memories of the past flash through my head

I freeze and panic I'm like the living dead

Loving you was a trapdoor, I can't get out

And now all i can do is scream and shout

next time my heart yearns for love, i'll say 'never'

cause your love is a curse that's lasting forever

Slaggis Newbie

Slaggis

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here's something i wrote a few months back when some crap happened to me. Why is it that sad poems are the best?

 

The world's turned against me, I've got no one to turn to

Everything you did to me hurt me and not you

you didn't even consider for a second what you had done

I wanna scream when i see you, turn my back and run

But I can't do that no, my heart yearns for you

Why I'm so hungover this love I ain't got a clue

We were so perfect until you changed your ways

You felt so differently in just a matter of days

You didn't even realise, you'd just killed a part of me

My life, my pride all broken, buried at sea

You didn't say why, I didn't understand

why a 'break' was needed when we were hand in hand

I could see it in your eyes there was something there

yet still we were seperate, you didn't even care

You lead me on for a while and then without reason

You finished me off, cut me, it felt like treason

 

No matter how i feel, no matter i do

The only things in my mind are of you

Memories of the past flash through my head

I freeze and panic I'm like the living dead

Loving you was a trapdoor, I can't get out

And now all i can do is scream and shout

next time my heart yearns for love, i'll say 'never'

cause your love is a curse that's lasting forever

 

I'm just a pawn in your game; but when the time arises

I'll be able to escape you and run in varied disguises

I remember loving you, what a goddesses face

No i look back and I see no grace

Your seem happy in the arms of him, the 'other'

If I see him in person i'd treat him anything like my brother

I want to break him and hurt him, and then you'll see

it was unfair the way you tormented me

Maybe one day you'll realise when you ain't blind

To have your heart broken, twisted ain't right

To have your passion ripped out creates devastation

I thought you were like jesus, god's own creation

And you'd never change, it was your beauty I saw

But all i remember of you 'I don't love you no more'

Do you know how it feels to be ruined and broken

Like a masterpiece I'm ruined, forever remain unspoken

Now I lay by myself, and ask questions to the sky

Was whatever you told me simply a lie?

No i'm stronger than you I'm going to prove it

Finish this repression, I'mma let loose and take a hit

From now on it can never be the same as before

Cos the me you knew doesn't exist anymore

 

No matter how i feel, no matter i do

The only things in my mind are of you

Memories of the past flash through my head

I freeze and panic I'm like the living dead

Loving you was a trapdoor, I can't get out

And now all i can do is scream and shout

next time my heart yearns for love, i'll say 'never'

cause your love is a curse that's lasting forever

 

Thats the one you sent me I think. Its pretty great. I really like the second to last verse.

 

You've got some talent.

conzer16 Newbie

conzer16

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The first verse I have just put a few chords over and it sounds fucking deadly!

 

Gonna doodle away with it for a while now and see what it's like!

Stranger Newbie

Stranger

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Having read your poem - I know exactly how you feel. It's commendable that you express yourself creatively after things like this happen. I also wrote shitloads of poetry after a similar, ah, "incident" some months ago.

 

If it helps, I assure you that things will be better after some time - I know everybody says that, but having been where you obviously are, I can promise you it's the truth. It will take less time than you think.

tapedeck Newbie

tapedeck

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Nice, I liked it lots. Last verse I decided to write a melody to it and dangle my vocals over it...Dangerous! I'd put it on the net but don't have a clue where to get good hosting for free anymore...Anyone?

Goron_3 Newbie

Goron_3

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Having read your poem - I know exactly how you feel. It's commendable that you express yourself creatively after things like this happen. I also wrote shitloads of poetry after a similar, ah, "incident" some months ago.

 

If it helps, I assure you that things will be better after some time - I know everybody says that, but having been where you obviously are, I can promise you it's the truth. It will take less time than you think.

 

Thanks :)

 

It happened a few months back, but I'm pretty over it now. Life is too short to think about the past :)

 

 

Thanks for everyones comments! I wrote another a while back similar; i'll post that soon.

 

I just rapped the first verse and it actually goes down pretty well :awesome:

Goron_3 Newbie

Goron_3

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It is good, cos you could feel the emotion but your rhyme schemes need serious work mate. Just seemed a bit dull, not many multi-syllabic rhymes and some of your metaphors were a bit played out. You said you rapped the first verse, but I can tell ya this now that would not function with any beat.

 

Its good, but with some work you could be much better.

 

Cheer mate.

 

Well i did most of that in a rush tbh and wasn't exactly trying to create a masterpiece, but thanks for the comment :)

tapedeck Newbie

tapedeck

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Cheers guys...I dally, Quality isn't what I want though..More to follow lol. I'm writing a song about Suda 51's upcoming game No More Heroes (or is it just "hero's now?).

No-one seems to really write about games, thought I'd attempt one..

 

Anyhoo, chorus:

 

Hero's killin' hero's baby,

hero's all their lives,

Hero's killin' Hero's baby.

There aint no more hero's around.

 

And so on....Will post when done.

killthenet Contributor

killthenet

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I wrote a song about Shenmue a while back, it's sort of a showtune. Might make it into a proper track, but showtunes don't particularly interest me. So unless I make a Shenmue musical, I doubt it'll ever be heard. Here it be anyhow.

 

Rumble Time Sea Shanty

I'm looking for some sail-ors.

I'm not fruit. That's the truit.

If you state otherwise, i'll punch you right between the eyes.

 

Do you know. Where the sailors hang out?

I just wanna talk, about trade routes to China... and such.

I'll sock you in the mouth. I don't want to grab on their crotch.

Just tell me where they go and i'll ease your pain you know.

 

If you see me fightin'

Don't predict the worst.

We'll be fully clothed, he won't be touchin' this bratwurst.

It might resemble a scene from Women In Love.

But if you see us rumblin' we're just two men fightin' quite rough.

 

Now I just wanna know, where the sailors hang out.

And if you don't tell me, i'll give you a clout.

I'm RYO HAZUKI! HEAR ME SHOUT!

 

I'm looking for the place, where the sailors. Hang out.

tapedeck Newbie

tapedeck

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I wrote this when I lived in Cyprus. In the winter there was no-one around at all. So I was frustrated. In many ways lol. I was also listening to some rolling stones that day and decided to write a song around a simple riff with a simple drum beat behind. Lyrics below and I may pop up the tune to follow. If people like the lyrics!

 

 

 

Touch me (song by Tapedeck)

 

Played over a sweet riff around A and F chords. Chorus into G,D,A.

 

Touch me, in the morning 'coz am horny

and I got no time oh,

and I need it, wanna feel it

Wanna go to the place

where my minds at rest.

 

Somewhere in the future,

is my suitor

and I got no time oh,

and I need it,

Wanna feel it

Wanna go to the place

Where my minds at rest

 

CHORUS:

 

I get by on what I need

I get by on what I feel

And I feel you.

 

We're here in the summer

What a bummer

that the sun don't shine

I wanna feel it,

God I need it

Wanna go to the place where my minds at rest

 

CHORUS x3:

 

I get by on what I need

I get by on what I feel

And I feel you.

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