Roostophe Posted August 30, 2006 Share Posted August 30, 2006 Some of you probably know that I have been writing songs recently. I'm currently writing songs for an EP I hope to record when I'm satisfied with what I have done. Anyway, today I wrote some lyrics for a song, right now I'm putting it with music and seeing if it works. But for now I'll post the lyrics here and see what you guys think. It's about a girl I knew at school who I was friends with, but I wanted to be more than just a friend, it could never work because of what I "did" a few years ago. For now I've titled it "Story Of Some Girl", though I will most likely change it. -Song lyrics here deleted because they were utter utter pants.- *Yep, those lines are from "Lover, You Should've Come Over" by Jeff Buckley. I do think it needs some work. As I said, I've only just written it. So, what do you lot think of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Minihobbsch Posted August 30, 2006 Share Posted August 30, 2006 That is good for your first draft. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EchoDesiato Posted August 30, 2006 Share Posted August 30, 2006 Good, it starts out a bit cheesy but becomes better. I'm curious about the music it will be set to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted August 30, 2006 Author Share Posted August 30, 2006 Good, it starts out a bit cheesy but becomes better. I'm curious about the music it will be set to. That's for another time. :wink: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
conzer16 Posted August 30, 2006 Share Posted August 30, 2006 First two verses are a bit of a tongue twister and a wee bit repetitive, but on the whole its not bad. Its a little wordy in places but gets the story across. Would love to hear the music you're stting it to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted August 31, 2006 Author Share Posted August 31, 2006 I will change the two verses today. They'll become the "beginning" of the so-called story. -EDIT 1- My problem with song-writing is that I don't know how to start it off. -EDIT 2- Actually, bollocks to just re-doing the first two verses, I'm gonna go back and re-do the whole thing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted September 2, 2006 Author Share Posted September 2, 2006 Okay, I've redone the bastard song. New opening verses and it's a bit longer, and a bit crude. No longer called "Story Of Some Girl" because it sounds shit. It went well with the music I put it to but last night I came up with a much better riff, it sounds better now. *currently untitled* -VERSE 1- There I was sitting on my arse watching telly Just 'cos my anger got the better of me. But I had an option that would change me It begain that day in May '03 Nothing could describe my mood When I entered that computer room The scene was not how I pictured With a scouse teacher calling me "Richard" I took my seat, now one of them That's when I saw her, she looked like heaven she looked like an angel, but then she said "You fucking idiot, Ed!" She was pretty, she was sweet. But when I told my mates this secret They laughed at me and joked at me 'cos I was as ugly as hell could ever dream to be. -CHORUS- But I could always see that she Would never even bother to love me Because I have some horrible reputation Which is some sick bastard's creation -VERSE 2- Fast forward to early '04 Suspended again, I had been in a fight I was an angry little shite But the fight was just to take the fall Come forward now to September '04 It was Drama we had to work together for She was great at it, I was pretty mediocre But as time went by I got much better On some dark night in November '04 I had said goodbye to her once before But that night I wanted to tell her She is the tear that hangs inside my soul forever* -CHORUS- But I always knew that she Wouldn't ever bother to love me Because I have a horrible nickname Part of a joke from a wanker's game -BRIDGE- As my feelings grew and grew for her I felt stupid, I felt like a total div It would never work, but I would give My kingdom for a kiss upon her shoulder* -VERSE 3- Then came July '05, school was all over We were all gonna go home and relax for summer When she came over to me and said: "Here's my e-mail, could you give me yours." "She could probably soon go out with me!" I was a bloody idiot, to think in that way. the truth was, does she even think to like me? "NO FUCKING WAY, MATEY!" -CHORUS- But I can now undoubtedly see She will never bloody love me Not because of a horrible nickname From a wanker's game Not due to the horrible reputation A sick bastard's creation. She just wasn't fucking interested! Okay then, second draft, what do you reckon? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twozzok Posted September 2, 2006 Share Posted September 2, 2006 What genre of music is this made for? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted September 2, 2006 Author Share Posted September 2, 2006 What genre of music is this made for? Well it will be rock. I'm not sure what type of rock as I haven't decided at this early stage. What I want to do is buy lots of music equipment, like a drum machine, a new bass guitar, buy some PC software and mix the sounds together. Because it sounds too raw and rubbish atm, I have got to add more layers before I'm satisfied with it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mcj metroid Posted September 2, 2006 Share Posted September 2, 2006 unusual.I never write lyrics because i cant,But really u should maybe try the music first next time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Minihobbsch Posted September 2, 2006 Share Posted September 2, 2006 unusual.I never write lyrics because i cant,But really u should maybe try the music first next time You mean adpapt the words to the music? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mcj metroid Posted September 2, 2006 Share Posted September 2, 2006 yes.I work with another guy with music.I write the music and then he applies lyrics.i think it works better that way.But many songs were created with the words first too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted September 2, 2006 Author Share Posted September 2, 2006 What I've done is that I've written a lot of riffs without lyrics I've left in reserve in case I write some lyrics that fit with the riff. It's much easier for me to pick up a guitar and create a riff than to pick up a pen(guin) and write some lyrics. I have written some lyrics that as of yet, have no music, If you'd like me to post the other lyrics, just say so and I will. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heaven Posted September 3, 2006 Share Posted September 3, 2006 awesome work dude! I always find some really good lyrics when I travel in the car but damn I never remember them! I will post sometime....sometime... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted September 26, 2006 Author Share Posted September 26, 2006 Last night I was larking about just making lyrics off the top of my head and I ended up with this. It's not a proper song. It's about football, and about the local rivalry between Aston Villa and Birmingham City. I also had an idea for the music to be riffs from two Black Sabbath songs, which are Iron Man for the chorus and Paranoid is the verses. Key - Black - Paranoid music Red - Iron Man music S.O.T.C. Shit on the City. That's the way it will be. Shit on the City. 'cos we hate them, you and me. Sing a song about the team that play in the colours of Blue & White Then we will laugh at them because we love to say they're utter shite. We'll sing some songs and laugh about how much we love to hate The Blues. And we'll also tell the world about our love for Tracie Andrews.* Shit on the City. That's the way it will be. Shit on the City. 'cos we hate them, you and me. We love to go on and on about our triumphs in Rotterdam. All they do is talk about what the hell happened to Enckelman. We've played against the best such as the giants of Serie A And all that they could do is talk about their win over Tranmere. Shit on the City. That's the way it will be. Shit on the City. 'cos we hate them, you and me. Nobody loves them, they'll just stare at themselves. Planning their vengeance, shit songs that don't work. We'll make a joke and they'll sigh and we will laugh and they will cry. When they're going nowhere, we're in Europe they'll be wondering why. *Tracie Andrews killed her fiance who was a Bluenose. And so Villa fans sing "We love Tracie Andrews". Thoughts, anybody. No? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
killthenet Posted September 26, 2006 Share Posted September 26, 2006 I like Villa. Therefore your song is good. Also, nice reference to a lovely murderer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted September 27, 2006 Author Share Posted September 27, 2006 I like Villa. Therefore your song is good. Also, nice reference to a lovely murderer. Cheers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted October 18, 2006 Author Share Posted October 18, 2006 I wrote this last night after listening to Radiohead for some inspiration. It's a first draft so I'll definitely be going back to it to improve it. These are some verses I put together, I might get rid of a couple of them. But this is what the song is at the moment. Climb a high mountain and admire the view. Look around and take in that view. Climb back down and remember that you Can say "I did that, too." Walk for miles through wind and rain Knowing you'll see their face again. And when you see them, Say "Hello" and "How are you." Climb the mountain to admire the view But you give in halfway through. You climb back down, tell them you tried. But everyone knows you lie. Walk for miles through wind and rain Knowing you'll see their face again. But if you give up halfway through, You can't say to them "I love you." We came and heard what we wanted to hear Although it was long to get here. We heard the sound and the sound is heard Everywhere travelling, like a bird. If you can't do it. Don't beat yourself up about it. Just know you tried your best. And try something new. Or try, try again. try, try again. try, try again. TRY, TRY, AGAIN! The world is turning, the flames are burning And the people are all living But if you just stay in that one place Nothing will ever remember your face. Climb the mountains and admire the view, Don't do it if you don't want to. If you want to sit there, be my guest. Don't mock others who have a life quest. Walk for miles through wind and rain Knowing you'll see their face again. And when you see them, Say "Hello" and "I love you." --- Well, what do you think? Also, If you have any of your own lyrics feel free to post them here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mcj metroid Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 i like it except that line I climb the mountain and admire the view i cant imagine that being in a song maybe just change admire to see Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted October 19, 2006 Author Share Posted October 19, 2006 i like it except that line I climb the mountain and admire the view i cant imagine that being in a song maybe just change admire to see I couldn't imagine the lyrics "Two jumps in a week I bet you think that's pretty clever, don't you boy?" in a song. But it is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted October 25, 2006 Author Share Posted October 25, 2006 I had this really stupid idea: Because the songs sound bare with only guitar and voice, I thought about using a videogame to make the bass guitar & drum parts. The only game I have for this is Music 2000, which is ancient, it sounds rubbish and a stupid idea, but do you think it's an idea worth trying? -EDIT- I've also had an idea about a band name: KnifeWrench, I got it from Scrubs. It will most likely not be a band name. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
killthenet Posted October 26, 2006 Share Posted October 26, 2006 Yeah, may aswell give it a try. Music 2000 is a clunky bastard but you'd be able to do some simple drum and bass parts. Could just do the bass parts on guitar and pitch it down later. Alright to post my own lyrics in here? No!? Then screw yous, I'm doing it anyway! These aren't so good, a work in drunken progress.And more of a poem I guess. Ode To The Spelling Could not escape your phonetic pattern. Though of different spelling It still had the same meaning. Though both contain the curve of the 'e' They're still quite different spellings you see. Both might say 'lie' but only one would be true Both could say 'lee' but only one of the two. Phonetically speaking your spelling is wrong. But it's beautifully written, I'll let you off on this one. Ms' Newsom spells it the other way. But yours still is superior, don't care what she says. I adore the way you spell your name? Can it even be possible? Seems incredibly lame. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted October 27, 2006 Author Share Posted October 27, 2006 That's pretty good. And it's fine to put your own lyrics on here. I'm having some problems. I'm trying to write this song about bullying, and I want to make this as a 'fuck you' to all those wankers who annoyed me when I was at school. And I can't really think of any decent enough lyrics. So if anyone has any ideas that they think might help then post them here, thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mcj metroid Posted October 27, 2006 Share Posted October 27, 2006 I had this really stupid idea: Because the songs sound bare with only guitar and voice, I thought about using a videogame to make the bass guitar & drum parts. The only game I have for this is Music 2000, which is ancient, it sounds rubbish and a stupid idea, but do you think it's an idea worth trying? -EDIT- I've also had an idea about a band name: KnifeWrench, I got it from Scrubs. It will most likely not be a band name. what like sampling from the videogame?By music 2000 do u mean that old ps1/pc game thing?lol im lost here That's pretty good. And it's fine to put your own lyrics on here. I'm having some problems. I'm trying to write this song about bullying, and I want to make this as a 'fuck you' to all those wankers who annoyed me when I was at school. And I can't really think of any decent enough lyrics. So if anyone has any ideas that they think might help then post them here, thanks. good idea.it's good to write something about an aspect that people care about.there is a lot of mush these days Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roostophe Posted October 28, 2006 Author Share Posted October 28, 2006 what like sampling from the videogame?By music 2000 do u mean that old ps1/pc game thing?lol im lost here Yes, that old PlayStation game. Although I do want to get a more recent game. What I mean is that I want to make the drum & bass part using Music 2000, as in creating a layout of drum beats and bass guitar riffs that I'll use to have in the background while I play Guitar and Vocals. Although I will need a rhythm guitarist in due time. good idea.it's good to write something about an aspect that people care about.there is a lot of mush these days I know a lot of people are worried about bullying, plus many famous people have admitted to being bullied when they were at school, and I just want to make this song to simply tell those who bullied me something along the lines of "I have risen above you, you lost, I won, fuck you arsehole!" But more powerful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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