mtg101

It is a well known 'fact' that while you're correcting someone else's grammar on a forum it's impossible not to make a mistake yourself. However I haven't found an error in my response yet. Please point it out to me.

I agree that kids shouldn't be exposed to foul language on the internet: they should learn that sort of thing in the school playground, as I had to. However, if we're to set a good example by not using bad language and correcting the kids when they use it, shouldn't we do the same with bad language usage? To that end, Ashley, your last sentence would have been better written as "Still, yes, the majority of forum members is kids".

My contribution to saving the planet will be using the low-power Wii, rather than an energy wasting PS3

That surprises me. I suppose that because I'm over 30, and all the people I play games with are over 30, I assume that there're loads of older gamers out there. These numbers probably scupper my plans of suggesting going for a few beers with anyone going to the Oxford Street GAME midnight release of the Wii...

Gamers might be a little predictable in their choice of books, but at least we do read.

31 here...

While commuting I'm rereading Stephen King's Dark Tower epic series, and while at home I'm rereading Alan Moore's Watchmen. Anyone got any ideas for NEW books I can read?

Your idea for an original game is a sequel?

It looks like all that's known is rumour at the moment: en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wii_Motor_Sports (sorry it's not linked... but I'm not 15 posts old yet, so I can't be trusted...)

Working in a partnership, or group, makes a lot of sense for comics. Commercial comics are rarely created by just one person. Often one person writes the story, another draws the art, and then others colour in the art and put the text on the panels. If you've got a friend who you can work with and split the work between you, and bounce ideas off each other, that might really help. Or maybe you could find someone on the internet to work with.

I assumed all Canadians looked like that. They do on South Park

Rather than rant on about how this hardly stands up to comparison with Moore, Gaiman, Ellis, et al, I'm going to try and be a little more constructive... Title Area Let's start with the title area. This takes up a lot of space, and as we can see below you're having problems with the space available for the dialogue, so you don't want to be wasting space in the title. So firstly, do we need the "Web Comic" bit? I'm on the web, I can see it's a comic... plus it might be mistaken for being titled "The Nintendo Fans Web Comic", in which case you'd have to face the anger of many apostrophe pedants (myself included). And then there's the date. Being part of the title I initially thought it was the date the comic was released on, only later did I realise that it was meant to be the date when the comic was set. While I'm on the date, I assume you meant to set the time at 10 minutes to midnight on the day before the Wii is released? In which case it would be 11.50pm, not am! Also not everyone in the world gets the Wii in November, most of us get it some time in December, so maybe "10 minutes before the Wii is released" or "The day before Wii-day..." Panel 1 This is already overcrowded with dialogue, and it would be even worse if you had to include the date-stamp that I suggested moving from the title. However there does seem to be a lot of free space in the next 3 panels... Panel 2 I think in this panel is meant to show the friend going online to catch up with news. It's really not clear though. Also not clear is the transition - has the friend gone home, or is he using the protagonist's computer? Plus there's lots of wasted space that could be used for dialog. Does the computer need to be so huge? Just a flatscreen with n-europe's logo an the top would be enough. Panels 3 Once again not too clear what's going on, maybe realisation about the news. Panel 4 Pretty clear what's going on here, the friend is panicking that he's late to get his new toy... Panel 5 ...so the friend heads off to "eb" games ("games store" or "local games store" might be better, we don't all get "eb" stores where we come from)... Panel 6 ...and the protagonist gloats. Keeping the same basic story, and assuming you, like I, have the artistic talent of a colour-blind hedgehog in a bag, I'd suggest you could rearrange the flow as such: Title Area Just has "The Nintendo Fans" as the title, with a small byline for yourself, as well as an issue number (you're doing more strips... right?). Panel 1 Graphics: just a door, centred to the left of the panel Caption: "The day before Wii-day..." Speech from door: "Dude, I'm back!" Speech from off-screen on the right: "How was your year in South America?" Panel 2 Graphics: friend on left, protagonist on right (just like the original first panel) Speech from friend: "Later... give me Revolution news!" Speech from protagonist: "Er... your mean give you Wii news..." Panels 3 Graphics: same as panel 2, but friend is looking shocked Speech from friend: "What the... Wee? Like..." Speech from protagonist: "Yeah... anyway... it comes with nunchucks..." Panel 4 Graphics: same again.... even more shocked looked on friend's face Speech from protagonist (probably needs two bubbles): "...and a light saber, and you can download classic games, and... and... you should probably get home and read about it!" Panel 5 Graphics: friend is stood in a huge queue Caption: The next day... Panel 6 Graphics: protagonist at home with his Wii Speech from protagonist: "I really should have told him I had one preordered..." Finally... keep trying Evan, nobody gets good at something without practice!

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